I agree a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time. Firstly being a celebrity you need to success in
some ways such as on music, modelling, acting and etc. Being a celebrity there have great benefits, such as they get
sponsored and becoming rich. A celebrity can affect a lot of people and bring benefits to people. Good image can
lead people to a good way, nowadays people like to act the way their celebrity behaves. Other than that benefits to
some company too, a celebrity can help a company to bring up their sales performance.
At the same time, there are problems too. Privacy and schedule will be exposed, celebrity will be living in the
spotlight. Photographer or fans might follow everyday, on the streets or gathering with friends. Their also will be
physically tired.
Lastly, being a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time.
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所有的點子都有相當具體的例子，讓讀者可以快速了解這篇文章的論點。
第二段觀點不只有個人作品中的觀點，還考慮到對於媒體公司好處，具有多方角度分析。
當名人的缺點寫得相當仔細，從隱私延伸到活在鎂光燈下，粉絲會跟蹤等等，整個缺點的流程相當符合邏輯
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Being a celebrity there have great benefits, such as they get sponsored and becoming rich.
Grammar
There are several benefits of being a celebrity, such as…
Vocabulary
可以舉一些被什麼東西Sponsored來讓讀者印象更為深刻，例如sponsored可以寫說sponsored by Pepsi這類超級大的公司，讀者可能就會有”oh wow impressive”的感受，之後再接下becoming rich就可以讓大家知道這東西向你變rich是什麼程度的rich
sponsored by Pepsi to shoot a TV commercial…
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Other than that benefits to some company too, a celebrity can help a company to bring up their sales performance.
Grammar
Other than that 主詞（a celebrity) benefits some company too, because a celebrity helps companies to bring up their sales performance.
Vocabulary
bring up 可以改為to increase或boost，感覺上比較有：「喔天啊，銷售額爆掉了OMG」。
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Their also will be physically tired.
Grammar
這裡用Their怪怪的，可能可以改成They will also be physically tired.
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Lastly, being a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time.
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這邊Lastly可以用In conclusion來總結，Inconclusion, being a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time.