| 縮寫 | 項目 | 舉例 | |
|---|---|---|---|
| C | Cash/Cost = money | 藝人（正向）：藝人很有錢 | |
| C | Convenience = time | 藝人（正向）：省時（有錢又省時、有助理，雜事都可以處理好） | |
| C | Connection = Ppl[Share, favor] | 有很好的人脈（人際關係） - 正向：Instagram有好幾萬追蹤，多人關注 - 負面：看到一堆宅男，連結較差 教育為例：朋友、同學等等 | |
| E | Emotion/Character | 個性跟情緒是綁在一起的 - 個性孤僻：對於藝人來講，可能會是Problem - 個性開放：可能會是好處，反之在教室他可能就會想跳樓 | |
| E | Education/Career | - 當名人可能需要學舞蹈、格鬥等等，這就可以在education - edu加分：獎學金、學歷；career薪水、工時、排班等等 | |
| E | Environment/Culture | 大議題、文化等等 - 文化：east vs. west、中國藝人、台灣藝人、西方藝人 blackpink等等，可以比較各區域藝人 - 家庭 |
Emotion: less stress, 放鬆後 更多時間能專注在工作上 （太短） Connection: 更多時間去跟其他人互動→假日出去玩、認識新朋友→ 增加人際關係 → 更多人生夥伴→ 當工作上有需要幫忙的地方可以有人找 （太長） Edu: 更多機會去自學新玩意如資訊、程式設計等等→增加工作競爭力 （perfect)
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你現在正在寫一個簡報，關於公司主管應該給下屬至少每年4週的假期來讓他們better at their jobs 現在我這裡有幾個面向，從人際連結來看： 更多時間去跟其他人互動→假日出去玩、認識新朋友→ 增加人際關係 → 更多人生夥伴→ 當工作上有需要幫忙的地方可以有人找 從教育來看：更多機會去自學新玩意如資訊、程式設計等等→增加工作競爭力 請用英文條列式回答出上面的兩個面相中，可以再增加什麼細節，並提到這個面向屬於：so what/ how / why
- Expanded Professional Network:
- So What: Holidays provide opportunities to broaden one’s social circle.
- How: Meeting new people during vacations introduces diverse perspectives, and these connections may extend to professional networks through shared interests or industry-related events.
- Why: A diverse network brings fresh ideas and resources, promoting innovation in the workplace. Additionally, having a broad professional network opens doors to potential collaborations, partnerships, and business opportunities.
- Self-Directed Learning:
- So What: Extended breaks allow for personal skill development.
- How: Employees can use vacation time for self-learning in areas like programming, accessing online courses or attending workshops.
- Why: Continuous learning makes employees more versatile, contributing to their professional growth. It also demonstrates the employee’s commitment to self-improvement, showcasing a proactive approach to staying relevant in the ever-evolving work landscape.
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哪些理由？為什麼？
AGREE 佔多數 How? 裡面具體細節可以提多一點
放假時間 減輕壓力，健康是最重要的
改善工作生活平衡 如果有休息，可以強化生產力
- 情緒健康有好處
- work-life balance（出去多走走，參加線下）
- 有休息，個人員工的創造力提升、有學習到新技能（對於企業來說，因為員工的能力提高，有利於企業的產出）
員工情緒健康
實現WorkLife Balance：有假期→放假出去走動 Why: 要有健康的身體才可以工作 How: 多去參加娛樂活動（社區活動、看電影逛街） So: 更多聯繫 So: 釋放壓力
對於企業生產力提高
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Have you ever thought about that some employees work for all year without holidays? Employees should have at least 4weeks vacations to perform better in their jobs because of their work-life balance and the improvement of companies productivity.
4 week’s holiday improves employees mental health.
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Have you considered that at least a 4-week holiday can make staff work better? Employees getting enough rest can make[add: both] health and working skills both[rearrange this word] better.
Some time for relaxing provides employees the[delete] opportunity[opportunities] to improve themselves. Having more time means they can study things they[that they’re…] interested[add: in] or spend time in their hobbies, which may provide creative ideas in their work. Many companies such as Google provides their employees spare time for their further study, whch[typo: which] may receive their better performance in working time.
Providing employees holiday can let them [delete: extra space] to rest well [delete: extra space] and it can decrease the mental health problem happening like anxiety, stressful[stress], or panic attack. For instance, people who has enough holiday to take a rest won’t feel lots of pressure. They can enhance their sleeping quality at night and avoid insomnia. Also, this will increase employees’ passion and working efficiency.
Therefore[comma] sufficient rest for employees contributes to improvements[improve] in both their health and job-related skills. The[delete] company[companies] can develop stably and continue to make progress. If companies giving employees enough short break, this will adjust their mindset[their mind set will be adjusted] and let them[delete] have positive energy to return back to work.
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Introduction
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| 原始作文 | 文法結構說明 | 文法 Concept | 給個例句 |
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| Have you ever thought about that some employees work for all year without holidays? | 刪除 “that” 後句子結構更自然。 | 不需要使用 “that” 來引導子句。 | Have you ever thought about how some employees work for the entire year without holidays? |
| Employees should have at least 4 weeks vacations to perform better in their jobs | 修改 “weeks” 為複數形式 “weeks”。 | 表示一段時間的單位時，應使用複數形式。 | Employees should have at least 4 weeks of vacation to perform better in their jobs. |
| because of their work-life balance and the improvement of companies productivity. | 添加 “the” before “improvement” 和 “productivity”。 | 在特定情境下，需要使用定冠詞 “the”。 | because of their work-life balance and the improvement of the company’s productivity. |
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| 作文原句 | 原句的原單字 | 建議替代的字 | 替代單字例句 |
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| Have you ever thought about that some employees work for all year without holidays? | about that | that | Have you ever thought that some employees work throughout the entire year without holidays? |
| Employees should have at least 4weeks vacations to perform better in their jobs | 4weeks | four weeks | Employees should have at least four weeks of vacation time to perform better in their jobs |
| because of their work-life balance and the improvement of companies productivity | companies | company’s | because of their work-life balance and the improvement of the company’s productivity |
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| 作文原句 | 原句的原單字 | 建議替代的字 | 替代單字例句 |
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| Have you ever thought about that some employees work for all year without holidays? | about that | that | Have you ever considered that some employees work throughout the entire year without holidays? |
| Employees should have at least 4 weeks vacations to perform better in their jobs because of their work-life balance and the improvement of companies productivity. | vacations | holiday periods | Employees should have at least 4 weeks of holiday periods to perform better in their jobs because of their work-life balance and the improvement of company productivity. |
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文法
| 原始作文 | 文法結構說明 | 文法 Concept | 給個例句 |
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| 4 week’s holiday improves employees mental health. | 在 “week’s” 前面不需要使用撇號 (‘s)，應為 “4 weeks”。 | 表示一段時間的單位時，應使用複數形式。 | 4 weeks holiday improves employees’ mental health. |
| The holiday provides employees a reasonable time to relax. | 刪除 “a”，因為 “reasonable time” 已經是不可數名詞。 | 不可數名詞通常不需要使用冠詞 “a” 或 “an”。 | The holiday provides employees reasonable time to relax. |
| They are able to take a part in some social activities or some entertainment events. | 刪除 “a”，因為 “take part” 是固定搭配，不需要冠詞。 | 固定搭配中不需加入額外冠詞。 | They are able to take part in some social activities or some entertainment events. |
| For example,they can go to watch movies with their new friends and family in their free time to keep connection with them,which is strengthened the bond between employees and society. | 修改 “new” 為 “friends and family” 前面，並將 “strengthened” 改為 “strengthens”。 | 修正描述新朋友和家人之前的語序，並使用正確的動詞形式。 | For example, they can go to watch movies with their friends and family in their free time to keep connection with them, which strengthens the bond between employees and society. |
| Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which rises from overwork. | 添加 “the” before “stress” 和修改 “rises” 為 “arises”。 | 需要使用定冠詞 “the” 以及正確的動詞形式。 | Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which arises from overwork. |
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| 作文原句 | 原句的原單字 | 建議替代的字 | 替代單字例句 |
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| 4 week’s holiday improves employees mental health. | week’s | weeks’ | Four weeks’ holiday improves employees’ mental health. |
| The holiday provides employees a reasonable time to relax. | provides | allows | The holiday allows employees a reasonable time to relax. |
| They are able to take a part in some social activities or some entertainment events. | take a part | participate | They can participate in various social activities or entertainment events. |
| For example, they can go to watch movies with their new friends and family in their free time to keep connection with them, which is strengthened the bond between employees and society. | keep connection with | maintain connections with | For example, they can go to watch movies with their new friends and family in their free time to maintain connections with them, thereby strengthening the bond between employees and society. |
| Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which rises from overwork. | rises | arises | Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which arises from overwork. |
| As a result, it will increase the stability of their mental health. | stability | overall well-being | As a result, it will increase the overall well-being of their mental health. |
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| 作文原句 | 原句的原單字 | 建議替代的字 | 替代單字例句 |
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| 4 week’s holiday improves employees mental health. | week’s | weeks’ | Four weeks’ holiday improves employees’ mental health. |
| The holiday provides employees a reasonable time to relax. | provides | allows | The holiday allows employees a reasonable time to relax. |
| They are able to take a part in some social activities or some entertainment events. | take a part | participate | They can participate in various social activities or entertainment events. |
| For example, they can go to watch movies with their new friends and family in their free time to keep connection with them, which is strengthened the bond between employees and society. | keep connection with | maintain connections with | For example, they can go to watch movies with their new friends and family in their free time to maintain connections with them, thereby strengthening the bond between employees and society. |
| Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which rises from overwork. | rises | arises | Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which arises from overwork. |
| As a result, it will increase the stability of their mental health. | stability | overall well-being | As a result, it will increase the overall well-being of their mental health. |
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| 項目 | 原始作文 | 延伸句子 |
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| so what | 4 week’s holiday improves employees mental health1. The holiday provides employees a reasonable time to relax. They are able to take a part in some social activities or some entertainment events. Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which rises from overwork. As a result, it will increase the stability of their mental health2. | 1 Moreover, adequate relaxation contributes not only to mental well-being but also 2 fosters creativity and 3 enhances overall job satisfaction. |
| how | 4 week’s holiday improves employees mental health1. The holiday provides employees a reasonable time to relax. They are able to take a part in some social activities or some entertainment events. Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which rises from overwork. As a result, it will increase the stability of their mental health2. | [^4^] By engaging in leisure activities, employees rejuvenate their minds, enabling them to return to work with increased focus and [^5^] a renewed sense of motivation. |
| why | 4 week’s holiday improves employees mental health1. The holiday provides employees a reasonable time to relax. They are able to take a part in some social activities or some entertainment events. Therefore, it can reduce the stress and loneliness which rises from overwork. As a result, it will increase the stability of their mental health2. | [^6^] The link between mental health and job performance is undeniable; companies that prioritize employee well-being often witness [^7^] higher productivity and [^8^] lower rates of absenteeism. |
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| 原始作文 | 文法結構說明 | 文法 Concept | 給個例句 |
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| Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacations. | 修改 “productivity” 為 “productivity”，“vacations” 為 “vacation”。 | 單數形式 “productivity” 和 “vacation”。 | Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacation. |
| Why? Because during this period,employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills in their fields,which is helpful for overall output of the companies. | 刪除 “in their fields”，因為 “skills” 已經包含這個意思。 | 避免重複表達相同的概念。 | Why? Because during this period, employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills, which is helpful for the overall output of the companies. |
| For instance, they may improve the ability of using some new softwares,such as using chatGBT to summarize their ideas. | 修改 “of using” 為 “to use”，“softwares” 為 “software”，“chatGBT” 為 “ChatGPT”。 | 使用正確的介詞和單數形式。 | For instance, they may improve the ability to use some new software, such as using ChatGPT to summarize their ideas. |
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| 作文原句 | 原句的原單字 | 建議替代的字 | 替代單字例句 |
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| Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacations. | Companies | The company’s | The company’s productivity will increase as employees are allowed to have four weeks of vacation. |
| Because during this period, employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills in their fields, which is helpful for overall output of the companies. | Because | During this time, | During this time, employees may undergo additional training courses to enhance their skills in their respective fields, contributing to the overall output of the company. |
| For instance, they may improve the ability of using some new softwares, such as using chatGBT to summarize their ideas. | ability of using | proficiency in using | For instance, they may improve their proficiency in using new software, such as using ChatGPT to summarize their ideas. |
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| 作文原句 | 原句的原單字 | 建議替代的字 | 替代單字例句 |
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| Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacations. | Companies | The company’s | The company’s productivity will increase as employees are allowed to have four weeks of vacation. |
| Because during this period, employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills in their fields, which is helpful for overall output of the companies. | Because | During this time, | During this time, employees may undergo additional training courses to enhance their skills in their respective fields, contributing to the overall output of the company. |
| For instance, they may improve the ability of using some new softwares, such as using chatGBT to summarize their ideas. | ability of using | proficiency in using | For instance, they may improve their proficiency in using new software, such as using ChatGPT to summarize their ideas. |
Topic Dev.
| 項目 | 原始作文 | 延伸句子 |
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| so what | Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacations1. Why? Because during this period, employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills in their fields, which is helpful for the overall output of the companies2. | 1 The enhanced productivity not only benefits individual employees but also 2 contributes to the overall success and growth of the organization. |
| how | Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacations1. Why? Because during this period, employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills in their fields, which is helpful for the overall output of the companies2. | 3 Through continuous training, employees become more adaptable to technological advancements, ensuring [^4^] sustained competitiveness in the market. |
| why | Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacations1. Why? Because during this period, employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills in their fields, which is helpful for the overall output of the companies2. | [^5^] Companies that invest in employee development often experience [^6^] higher innovation, leading to [^7^] increased market share and [^8^] improved customer satisfaction. |
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| 原始作文 | 文法結構說明 | 文法 Concept | 給個例句 |
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| Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacations. | 修改 “productivity” 為 “productivity”，“vacations” 為 “vacation”。 | 單數形式 “productivity” 和 “vacation”。 | Companies productivity will be increased as employees are allowed to have 4 weeks vacation. |
| Why? Because during this period,employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills in their fields,which is helpful for overall output of the companies. | 刪除 “in their fields”，因為 “skills” 已經包含這個意思。 | 避免重複表達相同的概念。 | Why? Because during this period, employees may have some extra training courses to promote their skills, which is helpful for the overall output of the companies. |
| For instance, they may improve the ability of using some new softwares,such as using chatGBT to summarize their ideas. | 修改 “of using” 為 “to use”，“softwares” 為 “software”，“chatGBT” 為 “ChatGPT”。 | 使用正確的介詞和單數形式。 | For instance, they may improve the ability to use some new software, such as using ChatGPT to summarize their ideas. |
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| 作文原句 | 原句的原單字 | 建議替代的字 | 替代單字例句 |
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| 4 weeks vacations are vital for employees’ mental well-being and companies efficiency. | weeks vacations | weeks of vacation | Four weeks of vacation are vital for employees’ mental well-being and the efficiency of companies. |
| Imagine that all employees are overworked, companies will suffer from low output and even result in bankruptcy. | Imagine that | If | If all employees are overworked, companies will suffer from low output and may even face bankruptcy. |
| In conclusion, companies are expected to allow employees to have at least 4 weeks holiday to relax. | are expected to allow | should provide | In conclusion, companies should provide employees with at least four weeks of holiday to relax. |
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| 作文原句 | 原句的原單字 | 建議替代的字 | 替代單字例句 |
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| 4 weeks vacations are vital for employees’ mental well-being and companies efficiency. | weeks vacations | weeks of vacation | Four weeks of vacation are vital for employees’ mental well-being and the efficiency of companies. |
| Imagine that all employees are overworked, companies will suffer from low output and even result in bankruptcy. | Imagine that | If | If all employees are overworked, companies will suffer from low output and may even face bankruptcy. |
| In conclusion, companies are expected to allow employees to have at least 4 weeks holiday to relax. | are expected to allow | should provide | In conclusion, companies should provide employees with at least four weeks of holiday to relax. |